Monday, July 18, 2011
Not to swamp B&A, but care to critique?
The first paragraph is a bit cliche, and the whole entry is filled with over-description.We don't need to know EVERYTHING. Try and take out most of what has no impact on the narrattive. I mean, we really dn't need a whole page on a guy eating his breakfast, do we?
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